I had to critique an article & I am afraid that I have not started it out right…please look over it and give me some pointers…you can also copy it and make fixes yourself if that’s a better way to show me where things went wrong in my paper. Here’s part of it & a skip to conclusion…I would be very pleased with help! (I know there is a bit on misspelling b/c I used a free program without spell check)
Mike Daniels starts off greatly in his article by saying, “After years of decline, smoking rates in New Jersey are on the rise again.” It gave me the feeling that he will be stating reasons or statistics that show great differences from the past. Well, it turns out that is just what he does. Daniels mentions big changes, where he retrieved his information from, and what else outside sources had to say on the topic.
First, Daniels mentions statistics from the American Lung Association in their State of Tobacco report of the year 2010. One topic mentioned New Jersey’s rise in adult smoking as another covered the fact that more highschoolers had also begun smoking. He also mentioned where the report information had come from, and that was from federal surveys done in 2009.
Furthermore, he mentions that the numbers in increased smokers should impact smoking and anti-smoking programs to do more, but they have cut funding in New Jersey for these types of programs greatly. The state brought in a lot of money from its taxes on cigarettes. The state is the “sixth-highest cigarette tax in the nation.” Yet, the state still cuts budgets dramatically mentions Daniels.
Tobacco companies spend a lot more than $200 million each year on their products in New Jersey. This worries the Garden State workers about the rise of smoking rates, deaths, and economic costs. They also want to know what will happen to the funding for anti-tobacco programs, or if they’ll even have them anymore.
“The state Department of Health and Senior Services says it will closely monitor new smoking figures to see if the increase was an anomaly or a new trend” says Daniels. He also goes on to what a spokeswoman of the depatment, Donna Leusner, says “The bottom line is that despite an extraordinarily difficult budget situation, the Department of Health and Senior Services remains committed to tobacco prevention as a key public health issue, and that is why we have merged tobacco prevention efforts as part of an overall chronic disease strategy.”
Daniels does a great job when pointing out what Edward Kazimir, an anti-smoking campaigner that worked in the state Department of Health for more than twenty years, says “A lot of people don’t understand that just because we have a law that calls for spending on these things, that doesn’t mean it happens.” And in 1998, there was an agreement to stop the Medicade reimbersement lawsuits that companies had to deal with. So since the year 2000, New Jersey had recieved between $220 million and $405 million a year. But, then-Gov. Jim McGreevey borrowed money against the state causing a $5 billion deficit in the year of 2004. Therefore losing funds to pay off the debt. Then Daniels adds on what the vice president of the Institute for Prevention with the Saint Barnabus Health System,Connie Greene, had said. And that was “That tobacco settlement money was for tobacco treatment and prevention.” Then he goes on using more facts that the states didn’t use their money that way that it should have been used. New Jersey tried, but McGreevey mortgaged off the settlement money. Then, in 2003 New Jersey was one of the leader states that funded anti-smoking programs. They included net sites that put in contact people that wanted to quit smoking with others that also wanted to quit and programs for support. Also there was a program, known as REBEL, to teach students why tobacco was bad. Then funding fell, and “The state now allocates just 0.5 percent of the $120 million recommended for New Jersey by the CDC since it revised its state spending recommendations in 2007,” mentioned Daniels.
He also continues with information on a hospital known as Saint Barnabus. Dr. Fred Jacobs, director of the Quality Institute for the Saint Barnabas Health Care System, mentioned that this hospital has kept two programs running for people who want to quit smoking even if the state doesn’t fund for them. Daniels quotes Greene, “We’re the only hospital in the state to pick up all the funding for these services…I don’t know how patients in some regions are going to get the help they need.”
…..In conclusion, throughout Daniels article there were a lot of great quotes and statistics. He did a great job at providing details and where the information had come from. This article was filled with knowledge. Therefore, Daniels did his work and found information that was valuable to his article. But, Daniels also had weak
Oh wow…sorry I ran it all together on here…it’s hard to tell where paragraphs begin and end…I hope you’re still able to help me! Please

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